1021021英文作文批改 - 籃球

My Favorite Sports
I still remember the first day of teaching basketball of our PE teacher in elementary. He taught many skills of basketball to each student, for instance, how to dribble, to shoot, to lay-up, and ask everybody to practice it after a month for test. In order to pass the test, I usually play 3vs.3 with other students at playground after class and at the day of test, I was the person who made hits at most and felt so happy. When I was junior high school student, I started to watch NBA and admired NBA players, Allen Iverson and Kobe Bryant. I became played basketball less and less from high school because of stresses of schoolwork.
我仍然記得在國小時我的體育老師第一天教我打籃球。他給每個學生教了很多籃球技巧，比如：如何運球、投籃、上籃而且要求大家要練習，一個月之後要測驗。我為了通過測驗，我常常在下課後的操場和其他學生玩鬥牛，在測驗的那天，我成了命中最多球的人，我覺得很開心。在我升上國中，我開始看NBA，我最崇拜的球員是Allen Iverson 和Kobe Bryant。但是我越來越少打籃球了，因為課業壓力。
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