英文自傳修改 - 運動

因為是自己一句一句翻過來的~文法上可能有很大的問題~
希望好心人可以幫忙修正一下^^"
Hi:
My name is OOO. Nickname is OO.30 years old. My favorite is sport, sing song and travel. There are 6 people in my family, including my mother, my brother, my three sisters, and me. They are married and enjoy in the work.
When I am a student, a lot of time to read and write. In college, go to ping-pong group and to obtain good result in the game. Singing contest won the champion with my classmates.
I join the army, exercise strong willpower.
To participate in the war simulation that is very special experience.
After military life.I Press served as the business work. Because pay visit many school, so I know road around Taiwan, and not afraid to Unfamiliar customers. I have good relation to my colleagues. When I leave company I feel a little sad.
I am hoping to get better life and to be a better man than today,
I make this decision that is going to Japan.
Before going abroad, I motorcycle around Taiwan by myself. Join to Marathon and triathlon. I got working holiday visa Japan, and travel to Japan one year along.
When I am in Japan, l also to learn language, and did many kinds of work.
Have done Famer, hotel waiter and aquaculture.
I back to Taiwan this year.
I hope use my learn to my work.
If you will give me a chance, I will do my best for company.
Thank you.
大家好:
我叫ooo，大家可以叫我oo。
今年30歲，喜歡運動、歌唱，也喜歡旅遊。
家裡有媽媽，一位哥哥及三位姐姐皆已成家。
在各自的行業裡亦有不錯的成績。
求學期間喜歡寫作，所以大多時間都在閱讀。
也累積不少的詩詞小品，曾在系刊中刊出。
大學參加了桌球社，拿過校際盃的殿軍。
系際盃的卡拉OK大賽，也得到團體組的冠軍。
當兵很幸運的抽到了”海軍陸戰隊”。
讓自己培養出更強韌的意志。
期間下過三次基地，也擔任過作戰士及值星下士，
參與演習也是十分特別的經驗。
退伍後第一份工作就是在oo書局擔任業務。
除了熟悉各地區的道路網絡外，
也練就了面對陌生客戶毫不畏懼的勇氣，
在學校裡的服務也受到老師們的肯定。
與公司的同事相處也十分融洽，
所以離職時在歡送會也十分不捨。
其實離開一個穩定的工作下了很大的決心，
無非就是希望自己能夠過得比現在更好。
所以離職後我給自己一年的時間沉澱與挑戰自我。
除了環島、參加馬拉松和鐵人三項之外，
我也申請了日本打工簽證，獨自一人前往日本體驗生活。
在日本一年的期間裡，除了學習語言，
也在日本各地旅遊，體驗不同的生活。
除了農場跟飯店，也當過水產公司的廠務人員。
回到了台灣，不僅希望自己在語言上更加精進，
也希望能在適合的職位上一展所學。
希望貴公司能給我這個機會，
我也將虛心學習，體現自我的價值。