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1. Brief：
My name is CC LIN. I grow up near the Qijin seaside in Kaohsiung. I have two little sisters and I’m the oldest daughter in my family. I am very independent girl because I always do my own work without my parents’ supervision, and help my parents to take care of my sisters when they are busy. And I am a very energetic person, too. I enjoy playing badminton or being guide to introduce university to freshmen and their parents for CJAC in leisure time. In addition, I also will take excursions to understand this culture of land where belonged to me.
2.Interest and Expertise:
In diverse social background, I am trying to bring up the different interests. I am very interest in making friends and sharing joy with them consequently; due to learning from class, I am fond of paying attention to stock market、simulate competitor. Another , because of picky personality, I am good at writing proposals、activity arrangement.
3.The process of pursuing my studies：
In addition to academic, I am filled up by group and part-time job. In academic, I gradually realize own direction. Such as Finance classes, these arouse my interesting to make me have ability to connect with practicing. Let me know how to evaluate enterprises, to make invest decisions. I won very nice remarks on some of contest.
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一、 簡述：
我是，從小就居住在高雄旗津，是靠海長大的小孩。我有兩個妹妹，我是家裡的長女，平常父母不在家，就會自己完成作業、做完爸媽交代的事情並一肩扛照顧妹妹們的責任，所以養成了獨立的個性，不太需要父母操心。我也是較有活力的人，平常課餘之時，我很享受羽球運動還有為即將入學新生及家長當一位導遊介紹我們學校。此外，亦會透過郊遊踏青認識屬於我生長的這塊土地之風情。
二、 興趣與專長：
在多元化社會背景下，我也不斷嘗試著培養不同的興趣，我十分熱愛跟大家交友、分享。源自學業所學，我喜歡投入於研究股票投資、模擬競賽。另一方面，因為審慎的個性，我也很擅長編寫企劃及做活動安排。
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三、 求學歷程：
我的大學生活裡，我不單只有課業，同時也被社團及打工填滿。在課業方面，經老師循循善誘，從大一到大四也漸漸清楚自己的方向，像是一些財金課程，這些課程不僅提起我的興趣，還使我有能力與實務做連結與分析，也讓我們學會如何對企業做評估、投資決策。我也曾在過去比賽獲得不錯的成績。